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10 (who?)
"Hope is a place,"
He said.
"Long-lost in the space
between stars and the skyline

Of cities,
so shadow-scarred and tarred
by trail-stretched wire
wound tight toward the horizon

That you can't even imagine
what love
we have lost
along the highway."

wax and wane a wash
against my windscreen,"

He said.

"They're waves
upon which I can watch
the patterns
of pressure-tides rolling on

as rush-hour reels:
broken wheels wrenched in a
stop-motion revenance
in red."

"We'll choke
in this caldera,"

He said.

"Caught supine
beneath the saturnine
and the fireflies

Cast ablaze
amidst the wreckage:
will not save me tonight."
Updated: 10/01/2010 @ 09:29
Project2010: 017 of 375 (January 9th)

Something a little different; at least in terms of presentation if not general style and subject matter.

This one was tricky to get to a point where I was reasonably content with it. The line-breaks, for example, have been altered extensively: to the point where I can barely tell the difference any more when I look at the pile of different versions I have cached in Notepad files. One version in particular doesn't even have line-breaks as the original intent was to present this as prose, of sorts.

One possible change that I couldn't quite decide upon is the presentation of the spoken segments: I'm starting to think that swapping the quotation marks for italic font would work better. Thoughts?
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shep4life Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
The first stanza caught me and the rest was divine
arctoa Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014  Student Photographer
Many thanks for taking the time to comment, it's appreciated.
shep4life Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Not a problem at all!
hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This deserved its own comment! My favorite!!!!!!!!! I can identify with this in so many ways, though it's hard to explain; mainly it's how you went about telling the story, though the emotional aspect is appealing as well.
arctoa Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Student Photographer
Many thanks; this is one of the few written pieces that I am quite happy with so I am glad that is able to trigger some sort of response in the reader.
CocoKingsolver Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Professional Photographer
I am reminded of Paul Bowles here with the Sheltering Sky, the cadence of your words, the word choice itself. It's the desolation and uncertainty in this I fear, being lost in a place we once were certain could provide safety, perhaps even save us from ourselves. I read too much in to it maybe. No, I do believe we are lost now.
arctoa Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Student Photographer
Thank-you; I've not read the work that you referenced but I'm familiar with it, and I appreciate your comment.
halcyonshores Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Your writing had an irresistibly abstract aura..

Who saved the Sirens?
arctoa Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Student Photographer
I'm glad that comes across.

They saved each other. D:
halcyonshores Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
A win win, then.
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