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Sirens

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"Hope is a place,"
He said.
"Long-lost in the space
between stars and the skyline

Of cities,
so shadow-scarred and tarred
by trail-stretched wire
wound tight toward the horizon

That you can't even imagine
what love
we have lost
along the highway."


"Headlights
wax and wane a wash
against my windscreen,"

He said.

"They're waves
upon which I can watch
the patterns
of pressure-tides rolling on

as rush-hour reels:
broken wheels wrenched in a
stop-motion revenance
in red."


"We'll choke
cold
in this caldera,"

He said.

"Caught supine
beneath the saturnine
street-light,
and the fireflies

Cast ablaze
amidst the wreckage:
Sirens
will not save me tonight."
Updated: 10/01/2010 @ 09:29
Project2010: 017 of 375 (January 9th)



Something a little different; at least in terms of presentation if not general style and subject matter.

This one was tricky to get to a point where I was reasonably content with it. The line-breaks, for example, have been altered extensively: to the point where I can barely tell the difference any more when I look at the pile of different versions I have cached in Notepad files. One version in particular doesn't even have line-breaks as the original intent was to present this as prose, of sorts.

One possible change that I couldn't quite decide upon is the presentation of the spoken segments: I'm starting to think that swapping the quotation marks for italic font would work better. Thoughts?
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shep4life's avatar
The first stanza caught me and the rest was divine